高考英语满分作文:Green Action in Our Class(5)

2018-07-16高考英语作文

满分理由

  本文格式正确,内容完整,表述清楚,衔接紧密流畅,时态语态使用准确,特别是结尾末段适度的发挥,既充实了内容,又符合逻辑,成为本文与众不同的亮点。

  Dear Bob,

  How are you these days?

  I’m so glad to know that you’ll come to our city to learn Chinese. You asked me to find a place for you. Now I’ve found one which I think is pretty good. The place is on Fang Cao Street which is near the No.11 bus stop. It’s just one stop away from Jianxin Chinese School.

  There are three rooms, a kitchen, a bathroom and a bedroom. Though it is not very big, only 25 square metres, I think it is suitable. By the way, the rent is 500 yuan per month. I hope you’ll like it. If not, I’ll try to find another place for you.

  Yours,

  Li Hua

满分理由

  本文内在逻辑性很强,由远及近。由外及内,层次分明,错落有致。同时让步状语从句运用得恰到好处,很出彩,再则结构完整,从开头的问候语到结尾都很完备。

  Dear Bob,

  I’m so glad that you are coming to learn Chinese here. I’ve already found you a house near our school. I’d like to tell you something about it.

  You may get on No.ll bus at Fang Cao Street and the next stop is just Jian Xin Chinese School. The house is near the school. It is about 25 square metres. In the bedroom, there is a bed, a sofa standing against the wall and a table near the window. You may find a light on the table and a chair next to it. There are two other rooms connecting the bedroom. The left one is a bathroom and the right one is a kitchen. So you may cook by yourself. The rent for the house is 500 yuan per month. Hope you’ll enjoy staying here!

  Yours,

  Li Hua

满分理由

  本文内容具体,详略得当,表述方式很有创造力和新意,长短句并用,语言结构富于变化,错落有致,顺畅圆润,尤其是情态动词和分词的运用很独到,为文章增色不少。

  Dear Bob,

  I’m glad to hear from you.

  Welcome to our city in september. I’ve found a suitable house for you. The house is on Fang Cao Street, not far from the Jianxin Chinese School. If you take the No.11 bus, it is just one stop.

  It is a flat on the third floor of a building. It has three rooms, a living-room, a bathroom and a kitchen. You can cook yourself. The mirror, the basin and the bathtub are very convenient for you. In the living-room, there is a bed, a sofa and a desk with chair. The desk is next to the window. It will be good for study. The total size is 25 square metres and the rent is 500 yuan a month.

  Yours,

  Li Hua

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