【名家点评】
戴望舒的诗《雨巷》发表于《小说月报》第19卷第8号。编者叶绍钧对《雨巷》的评价是:《雨巷》“替新诗底音节开了一个新纪元。”
朱湘在致戴望舒的信中,对《我底记忆》颇多誉美之词,文中高度评价《雨巷》,认为“《雨巷》在音节上完美无疵”,与Poe的Annabel Lee“真是异曲同工”,“在音节上,比起唐人的长短句来,实在毫无逊色。”
卞之琳在《戴望舒诗集序》中提到过这首诗,他说:“《雨巷》读起来好像旧诗名句‘丁香空结雨中愁’的现代白话版的扩充或者:稀释’。一种回荡的旋律和一种流畅的节奏,确乎在每节六行,各行长短不一,大体在一定间隔重复一个韵的七节诗里,贯彻始终。用惯了的意象和用滥了的词藻,却使这首诗的成功显得浅易、浮泛。”
《雨巷》是诗人用美好的“想象”来掩盖丑恶的“真实”的“自我解脱”,是“用一些皂泡般的华美的幻象来欺骗自己和读者”,除了艺术上的和谐音律美外,“在内容上并无可取之处”。
【英文翻译】唐正秋译版
A Lane in the Rain
Dai Wangshu
Alone holding an oil-paper umbrella,
I wander along a long
Solitary lane in the rain,
Hoping to encounter
A girl like a bouquet of lilacs
Gnawed by anxiety and resentment.
A girl
The colour of lilacs,
The fragrance of lilacs,
With the worries of lilacs,
Feeling melancholy in the rain,
Plaintive and hesitating.
She wanders along the solitary lane in the rain,
Holding an oil-paper umbrella
Just as I do,
Just like me,
Walking slowly in silence,
Aloof, sad and melancholy.
Silently she comes closer,
Closer, giving me
A glance like a sigh;
Then she floats past
Like a dream,
Dreary and blank like a dream.
Like a lilac
Floating past in a dream,
the girl floats past me;
Silently she goes further and further,
To the crumbling wall,
Out of the lane in the rain.
In the mournful melody of the rain,
Her colour has faded,
Her fragrance has disappeared,
Vanished into the void;
Even her glance like a sigh,
Melancholy like lilacs.
Alone holding an oil-paper umbrella,
I wander along a long
Solitary lane in the rain,
Hoping to pass
A girl like a bouquet of lilacs
Gnawed by anxiety and resentment.
The Alley in the Rain
Holding an umbrella, I'm alone
Wandering about the long, long,
Lonely alley in the rain,
Hoping to encounter
A girl who bears her melancholy
Like a lilac flower.
She has
The color of a lilac,
The fragrance of a lilac,
And the melancholy of a lilac.
She looks sorrowful in the rain,
Sorrowful and depressed.
She paces the lonely alley,
Holding an umbrella,
Like me,
Just like me—
Walking quietly and slowly
In coldness, solitude and melancholy.
Quietly she comes close,
Close to me and casts
A glance, like a sigh.
She drifts away
Like a dream—
So dreary and deep.
Like a lilac flower drifting by
In a dream,
The girl passes by me;
Quietly she is walking away and away,
To a broken hedge,
To the end of the alley in the rain.
In the plaintive tune of the rain
Her color fades,
Her fragrance disappears,
So do her sighing glance
And lilac-like melancholy.
Holding an umbrella, I'm alone
Wandering about the long, long,
Lonely alley in the rain,
Hoping to see passing by
A girl who bears her melancholy
Like a lilac flower.